After talking to Alan today he advised that I shrink my story even further.
To do this he suggested I create a simple outline:
-Establish (Man is one way in the beginning)
-Transition (What the characters sees that changes them)
He also suggested that I create my storyboard to a 9 frame sequence. If I can show the moral quickly and sharply the animation will be successful.
Important reminder of the day:
*In most situations write the ending first*
- Back To The Future
(Characters start one way, they see something that makes them change, characters have a resolved ending)